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Sunday, November 18, 2012

SHOW THEM WHAT YOU LOVE, Nov. 18, 2012

Show them what you love, a quote by David McCullough

I was struggling on how to start a scene. So much had happened in the previous scene, I needed to let the reader know how things transitioned and progressed. I started three times and erased three times. Then, I remembered David McCullough's call to excellence.

As I wrote what I loved it not only took me into the scene late (a very good thing), throughout the scene all that I had wanted to tell was shown in dribs and drabs and flowed naturally.

I took the scene to my critique group and they loved it. So I came late and left early. My group always has something to suggest. This time the revisions were minor. I felt publishable.

The male's POV here lies in what I love. But only if you ask, will I show you the scene or how I it started.

Bob

Show. Don't tell.

Show Me from My fair Lady (don't speak of love—show me)
version 1 from the movie with Audrey Hepburn (song by Hepburn—in the movie her voice was dubbed for this song).
version 2 from the Broadway play with Julie Andrews


 

6 comments:

  1. Congratulations on nailing your scene Bob!

    And Show Me from My Fair Lady is one of my favorites!!! :)

    Lisa

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    1. Thanks Lisa,

      We'll have to get together and talk Broadway.

      Bob

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  2. Ditto what Lisa said about your scene!

    Pam

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  3. Thanks Pam,

    I'm starting to rev up Twitter/ a little of Tumblr/ Facebook etc. You know, just in case someone calls.....

    Bob

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  4. Thanks Akon.
    I try. I enjoy adding the videos because I like them. i figure other will too.
    Bob

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