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Tuesday, April 24, 2012
Big guys do cry, April 24, 2012
Big boys do cry. April 24, 2012
My critique group is led (when she’s in good health) by a published
author, ex-English professor. Her comments work better than heat-seeking
missiles. She has often said to us, “I want to see more emotion in this scene.”
I often thought, I thought I did that. We call her admonition, McFeelings.
you listened to one of her stories, you’d be taken on a whirlwind of thought by
the heroine, which resembles the confused state of Blanch in a Streetcar Named
Desire. You’d feel like your emotions were taking all the rides at Six-flags at once.
Finally, boiling over with frustration (an emotion), I
looked up emotion in Webster’s College Dictionary:
effective state of consciousness in which joy, sorrow, fear, etc. is
experienced, as distinguished from cognitive and volitional states of
goes on to mention (almost as an afterthought) hate and love and how emotion is
a strong agitation of feelings.
I guess Webster’s use
of strong is where Webster and I part company. IMO, anything that is not
thought out, born of logic, or instinctual is an emotion. Sometimes emotions
serve survival, if not of the individual then of others.
iceberg rule. Guys think more and say less, which, we discovered is a useful
tool in designing interior monologue. I.e., guys may cry less because they have
to fight some unseen foe, be ready to protect the cave, and couldn’t be
physically diminished for even a moment. Weakness = crying = a loss of
concentration = death for him and his tribe.
There was always
the guy who painted his favorite mastodon on the cave wall and cried over the beauty
of his creation. I’m an artist. I usually cry (or almost) over your beautiful
words and hummingbirds who land on my red shirt or the line, “here’s looking at
Emotions can be
held in, but they’re still there.
I’d like to expand the
dictionary’s etc. I’m sure there are more: Desire (part
instinct). Hugging Tenderness Greed Sharing Giving Hiding feelings to
appear strong Being aloof Being a pain in the
ass Self-centeredness And many more
I disagree with
Webster about ‘strong’ and our critique group leader about how to write emotion.
But, any critique she gives serves improves my writing.
From a guy’s POV, consider
that if he’s not talking much, his emotions are bottled up and would take
longer to dissipate than a heroine’s emotions when she talks or lets them out which could release the tension more quickly.