Show them what you love, a quote by David McCullough
I was struggling on how to start a scene. So much had happened in the previous scene, I needed to let the reader know how things transitioned and progressed. I started three times and erased three times. Then, I remembered David McCullough's call to excellence.
As I wrote what I loved it not only took me into the scene late (a very good thing), throughout the scene all that I had wanted to tell was shown in dribs and drabs and flowed naturally.
I took the scene to my critique group and they loved it. So I came late and left early. My group always has something to suggest. This time the revisions were minor. I felt publishable.
The male's POV here lies in what I love. But only if you ask, will I show you the scene or how I it started.
Bob
Show. Don't tell.
Show Me from My fair Lady (don't speak of love—show me)
version 1 from the movie with Audrey Hepburn (song by Hepburn—in the movie her voice was dubbed for this song).
version 2 from the Broadway play with Julie Andrews
I was struggling on how to start a scene. So much had happened in the previous scene, I needed to let the reader know how things transitioned and progressed. I started three times and erased three times. Then, I remembered David McCullough's call to excellence.
As I wrote what I loved it not only took me into the scene late (a very good thing), throughout the scene all that I had wanted to tell was shown in dribs and drabs and flowed naturally.
I took the scene to my critique group and they loved it. So I came late and left early. My group always has something to suggest. This time the revisions were minor. I felt publishable.
The male's POV here lies in what I love. But only if you ask, will I show you the scene or how I it started.
Bob
Show. Don't tell.
Show Me from My fair Lady (don't speak of love—show me)
version 1 from the movie with Audrey Hepburn (song by Hepburn—in the movie her voice was dubbed for this song).
Congratulations on nailing your scene Bob!
ReplyDeleteAnd Show Me from My Fair Lady is one of my favorites!!! :)
Lisa
Thanks Lisa,
DeleteWe'll have to get together and talk Broadway.
Bob
Ditto what Lisa said about your scene!
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